Thursday, November 19, 2015
Thursday, November 12, 2015
Reading term 4.
Wednesday, November 11, 2015
Technology term 4
Tuesday, November 10, 2015
Reading term 4
Monday, November 9, 2015
Writing term 4
It was a typical Sunday in the middle of summer,nothing to do.Mum was sitting in the sun as usual Dad was on his computer doing work and us kids,well we were doing absolutely nothing.But then we heard the ground shaking.I shouted out "it's an earthquake" and Tali shouted "Don't worry it's just dad farting". But then....we saw zombies coming down our driveway.They looked ripped apart and bloody.They were about 3 foot tall and the faces had scars and had all sorts of weapons in them.The leader of it was fat as a whale and had to be carried by a long truck. . Oh did I not mention we were rich and had our own weapon room each.We could hear the zombies pounding on the door as hard as they could.Two minutes later ginormous and fat zombies charged at the door and busted through.We all charged.We were all geared up with guns,knives and toilet paper(why toilet paper?well to blind them).We all jumped in a car each(we had six cars of course)and sped off through the city.When we looked out the window we could see building and houses on fire.The road was hard to drive on because there were dead bodies,brains and puddles of blood that made the road slippery.There were zombies chasing us and I surprise usain bolt was chasing us(but wait how did usain bolt get over to New Zealand.any way).We drove to the science lab and tried to make an antidote.The first two hundred times we tried we failed. Mum shouted "zombies coming in". I said "we got this" so Tali,Rudy and I held them off until we killed them all.But then the boss zombie came along and guess who it was dahn dahn daaahn MR EALES.My old principle from clive school.We all screamed "he's gonna kill us all"."Shut up everyone"I said.Dad's still on the antidote so all we have to do is hold Mr Eales off."BAM" dad shouted,crushed it. |
I chose this example because:
I think that it's the best writing and I like the way that I used description. |
Comment from the teacher:
You certainly gave me a really clear picture of where your events started. I think you are beginning to group information well and even put them into paragraphs. You have started to explore different kinds of punctuation too, to make your writing more interesting. You could improve your writing by adding more description of your characters. What did the zombies look like? Some information about feelings could be good too. How did you feel when you first saw them? |
How I used the information in this comment to improve my writing:
I described the zombies like she said that I should do and I made it more interesting. |
What I need to work on now to improve my writing:
For speech I need to miss lines when a new speaker speaks. |
Thursday, October 15, 2015
Maths term 4 week 1
Thursday, September 24, 2015
Tuesday, September 22, 2015
Wednesday, August 26, 2015
Tuesday, August 25, 2015
Wednesday, August 12, 2015
Maths term 3
Wednesday, July 1, 2015
Monday, June 29, 2015
Te Reo
Term 2 recount
Thursday, June 25, 2015
Sunday, June 7, 2015
Wednesday, June 3, 2015
Monday, May 25, 2015
Thursday, May 14, 2015
P.E
Monday, May 11, 2015
Inquiry
Personal identity T shirt
Sunday, May 3, 2015
Statistics
Monday, March 23, 2015
Monday, March 16, 2015
Writing Term 1
WILF:
I use a mixture of short and joined sentences in my writing. Sometimes use sentences with conjunctions at the start.
I sometimes use different sentence forms deliberately to get the reader’s attention.
I use ‘tense’ (past, present or future) correctly.
I use capital letters, full stops, exclamation marks and question marks correctly without being reminded..
I sometimes use list commas, apostrophes for contractions and speech marks.
Writing Task: Think back to a really special experience you have had. It might be a birthday, a family dinner or a trip somewhere. Write a recount about it. |
Starter sentence:
It started out just like any other day.
On Saturday my family watched a movie called life of Pi.We got to stay up till ten o'clock.Life of Pi is a sad movie because his whole
family dies in a ship crash in the ocean.Pi has to survive out in the ocean with a tiger named Richard Parker.There was also a monkey,zebra and a kioti.The kioti killed the monkey and zebra.Richard Parker killed the kioti and feasted on all of them.Pi
found food under the canapés ,there was water cans and blocks of biscuits .A Few days later he found a island in,Pi started to eat the ground,the seaweed and roots.He found a field of meerkats .There were swimming holes and swam in it.He stayed at the island for the night and at night the swimming holes were poisoned by something.Lots of sea creatures floated up dead.The next day he stocked up with the roots ready to go back into the middle of the sea.Then two weeks after Pi finally found India again five of his own kind came and took Pi to the hospital.Two men came and talked to him about the Japanese cargo ship crash in the middle of the sea.
Next step-to improve my tense.