Writing Term 1

WILF:  

• I use a mixture of short and joined sentences in my writing.  Sometimes use sentences with conjunctions at the start.

• I sometimes use different sentence forms deliberately to get the reader’s attention.

• I use ‘tense’ (past, present or future) correctly.

• I use capital letters, full stops, exclamation marks and question marks correctly without being reminded..

• I sometimes use list commas, apostrophes for contractions and speech marks.

Writing Task: Think back to a really special experience you have had.   It might be a birthday, a family dinner or a trip somewhere.  Write a recount about it.

Starter sentence:

It started out just like any other day.  

On Saturday my family watched a movie called life of Pi.We got to stay up till ten o'clock.Life of Pi is a sad movie because his whole

family dies in a ship crash in the ocean.Pi has to survive out in the ocean with a tiger named Richard Parker.There was  also a monkey,zebra and a kioti.The kioti killed the monkey and zebra.Richard Parker killed the kioti and feasted on all of them.Pi

found food under the canapés ,there was water cans and blocks of biscuits .A Few days later he found a island in,Pi started to eat the ground,the seaweed and roots.He found a field of meerkats  .There were swimming holes and swam in it.He stayed at the island for the night and at night the swimming holes were poisoned by something.Lots of sea creatures floated up dead.The next day he stocked up with the roots ready to go back into the middle of the sea.Then two weeks after Pi finally found India again five of his own kind came and took Pi to the hospital.Two men came and talked to him about the Japanese cargo ship crash in the middle of the sea.

Next step-to improve my tense.